Writing Skills II, Homework for Week 13

In Week 13 we will be having our final mock exam and I will be returning your second at-home assignment to you. For homework, I'd like you to have a look at the student essay I distributed to you at the end of class today and to revise it so that it uses modified formal/formal register. The essay was written in response to the question: "Should all pupils/students be required to study at least two foreign languages?" Assess the essay in terms of its language, structure, argumentation, and detail. You will need to revamp the essay entirely in order to have it conform to academic standards and conventions.